My decision to pursue graduate study in the United States is underscored by my desire to be a part of the graduate program at your institution. Purdue University offers the flexibility needed for such a vast and rapidly changing field. The research facilities and the faculty at the university are par excellent.

Communications is an industry that has changed our lives. In a very short period it has changed the way we have looked at things since centuries. It is one industry that is going to shape our future for centuries to come. Hence my desire to do masters in electrical engineering with communications as my major.

My interest in electronics blossomed during my high school years. It was the time when technology had begun to make an impact on the lives of people in India. Hence engineering with electronics as my major was the first choice for my undergraduate studies. Right since the beginning of my undergraduate study electronics is a subject that has fascinated me with its power of applications. The subjects that I have studied include Linear Electronics, Digital Electronics. These laid the foundation for my courses in Electronic Communication & Communication Systems at a later stage. My undergraduate studies already focus on the communications aspect of electronics. A masters degree in electrical engineering with communications as major field is the next logical step.

For the past four months I have been working as a project trainee at the Indian Institute for Advanced Electronics. I am working on the design and development of a "PC Controlled Digital Serial Data Generator". This short stint has given me invaluable practical experience. It has given me the confidence to pursue a masters degree and also kindled a desire to do research.

During the course of my work at IIAE, I have come across several scientists. Most of them work in different areas of communications. Interactions with them have made me realize the vastness and the scope of communications. My discussions with them convinced me that specializing in communications will suit me very well.

The subject of research which interests me very much is spread spectrum communication systems. Coding theory and combinations is another research subject which arouses my curiosity. The subject Communication Theory which I am studying at present introduces these topics in theory. I am eager to find out more about the applications of coding theory to spread spectrum communication systems.
In addition I have been a student member of the IEEE (Institute of Electrical and Electronics Engineers, Inc.) for the past three years. Through its workshops/seminars and publications like the 'The Spectrum' it has exposed me to a lot of emerging technologies in the field of communications.

It is a strong belief in my family that the American education system has the best to offer in the whole world. This belief arises out of the experience that my parents had when they did their Masters of Science in the University of Pennsylvania during the years 1967-69. If I can get an opportunity to be a part of that intellectually stimulating environment, I am sure my talents will be put to optimal use.

India is a developing country with an enormous potential in the information technology business. To serve the needs of this developing industry and more important its vast population, communications is going to become of utmost importance. Thus conditions here are very conducive to supplement my aspirations when I return after completing my graduate studies.

Review of SOP

1st Paragraph:
While it's accepted wisdom that you have to suck up to the university, doing that in the very first paragraph isn't always seemly. This is something that all applicants should be careful about.
Something else that's essential in these personal essays is to sound natural. In this paragraph, 'underscores' and 'par excellent' don't come across too well. This kind of awkward phrasing is best avoided.

2nd Paragraph:
The stunted delivery is perpetuated in this paragraph.
Also, the idea behind the first three sentences could have been expressed in just one. Certainly could do with tightening.

3rd Paragraph:
'Have been doing communications, hence want to continue doing communications' seems like a facile point to make.
And notice how the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs end on pretty much the same note.

4th & 5th Paragraph:
The essay is considerably strengthened by his being able to convincingly convey his strong grounding in electronics.
The 4th and 5th paragraphs mesh in ideas and content, but the essay loses continuity because the project has been spread over two paragraphs.
A project is generally a golden opportunity to convey personal growth, an issue whose importance cannot be understated. An applicant could do well to focus on how she grew as a result of her experiences. A project is perfect in this sense because it can be used to convey both personal and technical growth.

6th Paragraph:
It would have been so much better if the applicant had put across what it was about 'spread spectrum communication' etc interests him. Remember that it's always prudent to bring out something about your intended major that strikes you personally.

7th Paragraph:
The essay now switches track to biography mode. If this had been placed before the 6th paragraph, the applicant could have possibly quoted something from the magazine that inspired him to take up communications as his major

8th Paragraph:
The parents part comes a bit too late in the essay to carry any relevance.
By now, you should be building up to a conclusion and this particular essay is let down by bringing in family history this late.

9th Paragraph:
Once again, in this paragraph you want to round off all the points you've been trying to make so far. Essentially you want to make them want you.
By using a phrase like 'conducive to supplement my aspirations' in the essay, the applicant goes to show that we're still in the awkward zone.

Summary:
This essay's brevity is it's saving grace
Thankfully, it also gets apparent that the applicant has a strong case to make
But the essay fails the 'page preview' test. We generally advise applicants to look at their essay by reducing the size of the text to 50% of normal. Even after you've done this you try and decide what each paragraph stands for and then see if the paragraphs link.
As a follow-up to what we've said above, this essay barely has a coherent flow. You'd be able to recognize the interests-biography-project-project-interests-biography-conclusion pattern the essay follows. So while it has a lot of interesting elements, they don't add up in a holistic manner.
So we'd say that this essay would be an excellent early draft. With a little more thought and effort, it could have morphed into an extremely effective piece of writing. The moral is that initial drafts need strong follow-up action on your part.